The Devil with the Three Golden Hairs
by Brothers Grimm · from Household Tales
Adapted Version
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Once, a baby boy was born. He had a golden mark. A wise old woman came. "Lucky boy!" she said. His mother and father loved him.
The King heard about the lucky baby. He did not like this news. "No! Not my girl!" said the King. He took the baby. He put him in a basket. He sent the basket down the river. Splash!
The basket floated and floated. It came to a big mill. A kind miller found the baby. "Oh! A little boy!" they said. They were so happy. They loved the baby like their own son.
Many years went by. The lucky boy grew big and strong. One day the King saw the boy. The King was angry. He wrote a letter. "Take this to the Queen," he said. The letter said, "Send this boy far away."
The boy walked and walked. He came to a big forest. He met kind forest folk there. "Where are you going?" they asked. "A letter for the Queen!" said the boy. The forest folk read the letter. "This is not a good letter!" they said. They wrote a new letter. "Let this boy marry the Princess."
The boy gave the letter to the Queen. The Queen read it. "How nice!" she said. The boy and the Princess got married. They had a big party. They liked each other very much.
Then the King came home. He saw the boy with the Princess. He was very angry. "No! No! No!" he said. "Bring me three golden hairs. They are from the Great Wizard. He lives far, far away. Only then can you stay." The boy said, "I will do it!"
The boy walked and walked. He came to a town. "Our fountain has no water!" the people said. "I will help you!" said the boy. He walked on. He came to a new town. "Our apple tree has no apples!" they said. "I will help you!" said the boy. He walked on. He met a sad boatman. "I must row and row. I cannot stop!" said the boatman. "I will help you!" said the boy.
At last the boy found the Wizard's cave. The Wizard's kind grandmother was there. "Shhh! Come here, child," she said. "I will help you. Hide here." She put him behind a big chair. The boy was safe.
The Great Wizard came home. He was very tired. He fell asleep in his big chair. The grandmother pulled one golden hair. "Ouch!" said the Wizard. "I had a bad dream," said the grandmother. "A fountain has no water. Why?" "Oh!" said the Wizard. "A big stone is in the well. Take it out!" He fell asleep again. The grandmother pulled a second golden hair. "Ouch!" said the Wizard. "I had a bad dream. An apple tree has no apples. Why?" "A little mouse eats the roots. Shoo it away!" He fell asleep again. She pulled the third golden hair. "OUCH!" said the Wizard. "A boatman cannot stop rowing. Why?" "He can give the oar to someone new!"
The grandmother gave the boy three golden hairs. "Thank you!" said the boy. He went home. He told the first town, "Take the big stone out!" The fountain had water again! They gave him many gifts. He told the next town, "Shoo the mouse away!" The tree had golden apples again! They gave him many gifts too.
The King saw all the gifts. He wanted gifts too! "Where did you get those?" he asked. "The boatman can help you," said the boy.
The greedy King ran to the boat. The boatman gave the King the oar. Now the King had to row and row! He could not stop. And maybe he is still rowing today!
The lucky boy and the Princess were very happy together. They were kind to everyone. And that is the end of the story, dear child. Sleep well!
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Original Story
The devil with the three golden hairs
A fairy tale by the Brothers Grimm
There was once a poor woman who gave birth to a little son; and as he came into the world with a caul on, it was predicted that in his fourteenth year he would have the King's daughter for his wife.
It happened that soon afterwards the King came into the village, and no one knew that he was the King, and when he asked the people what news there was, they answered, "A child has just been born with a caul on; whatever any one so born undertakes turns out well. It is prophesied, too, that in his fourteenth year he will have the King's daughter for his wife."
The King, who had a bad heart, and was angry about the prophecy, went to the parents, and, seeming quite friendly, said, "You poor people, let me have your child, and I will take care of it." At first they refused, but when the stranger offered them a large amount of gold for it, and they thought, "It is a luck-child, and everything must turn out well for it," they at last consented, and gave him the child.
The King put it in a box and rode away with it until he came to a deep piece of water; then he threw the box into it and thought, "I have freed my daughter from her unlooked-for suitor."
The box, however, did not sink, but floated like a boat, and not a drop of water made its way into it. And it floated to within two miles of the King's chief city, where there was a mill, and it came to a stand-still at the mill-dam. A miller's boy, who by good luck was standing there, noticed it and pulled it out with a hook, thinking that he had found a great treasure, but when he opened it there lay a pretty boy inside, quite fresh and lively. He took him to the miller and his wife, and as they had no children they were glad, and said, "God has given him to us." They took great care of the foundling, and he grew up in all goodness.
It happened that once in a storm, the King went into the mill, and he asked the mill-folk if the tall youth was their son. "No," answered they, "he's a foundling. Fourteen years ago he floated down to the mill-dam in a box, and the mill-boy pulled him out of the water." Then the King knew that it was none other than the luck-child which he had thrown into the water, and he said, "My good people, could not the youth take a letter to the Queen; I will give him two gold pieces as a reward?" - "Just as the King commands," answered they, and they told the boy to hold himself in readiness. Then the King wrote a letter to the Queen, wherein he said, "As soon as the boy arrives with this letter, let him be killed and buried, and all must be done before I come home."
The boy set out with this letter; but he lost his way, and in the evening came to a large forest. In the darkness he saw a small light; he went towards it and reached a cottage. When he went in, an old woman was sitting by the fire quite alone. She started when she saw the boy, and said, "Whence do you come, and whither are you going?" - "I come from the mill," he answered, "and wish to go to the Queen, to whom I am taking a letter; but as I have lost my way in the forest I should like to stay here over night." - "You poor boy," said the woman, "you have come into a den of thieves, and when they come home they will kill you." - "Let them come," said the boy, "I am not afraid; but I am so tired that I cannot go any farther:" and he stretched himself upon a bench and fell asleep.
Soon afterwards the robbers came, and angrily asked what strange boy was lying there? "Ah," said the old woman, "it is an innocent child who has lost himself in the forest, and out of pity I have let him come in; he has to take a letter to the Queen." The robbers opened the letter and read it, and in it was written that the boy as soon as he arrived should be put to death. Then the hard-hearted robbers felt pity, and their leader tore up the letter and wrote another, saying, that as soon as the boy came, he should be married at once to the King's daughter. Then they let him lie quietly on the bench until the next morning, and when he awoke they gave him the letter, and showed him the right way.
And the Queen, when she had received the letter and read it, did as was written in it, and had a splendid wedding-feast prepared, and the King's daughter was married to the luck-child, and as the youth was handsome and agreeable she lived with him in joy and contentment.
After some time the King returned to his palace and saw that the prophecy was fulfilled, and the luck-child married to his daughter. "How has that come to pass?" said he; "I gave quite another order in my letter." So the Queen gave him the letter, and said that he might see for himself what was written in it. The King read the letter and saw quite well that it had been exchanged for the other. He asked the youth what had become of the letter entrusted to him, and why he had brought another instead of it. "I know nothing about it," answered he; "it must have been changed in the night, when I slept in the forest."
The King said in a passion, "You shall not have everything quite so much your own way; whosoever marries my daughter must fetch me from hell three golden hairs from the head of the devil; bring me what I want, and you shall keep my daughter." In this way the King hoped to be rid of him for ever. But the luck-child answered, "I will fetch the golden hairs, I am not afraid of the Devil."
Thereupon he took leave of them and began his journey. The road led him to a large town, where the watchman by the gates asked him what his trade was, and what he knew. "I know everything," answered the luck-child. "Then you can do us a favour," said the watchman, "if you will tell us why our market-fountain, which once flowed with wine has become dry, and no longer gives even water?" - "That you shall know," answered he; "only wait until I come back." Then he went farther and came to another town, and there also the gatekeeper asked him what was his trade, and what he knew. "I know everything," answered he. "Then you can do us a favour and tell us why a tree in our town which once bore golden apples now does not even put forth leaves?" - "You shall know that," answered he; "only wait until I come back." Then he went on and came to a wide river over which he must go. The ferryman asked him what his trade was, and what he knew. "I know everything," answered he. "Then you can do me a favour," said the ferryman, "and tell me why I must always be rowing backwards and forwards, and am never set free?" - "You shall know that," answered he; "only wait until I come back."
When he had crossed the water he found the entrance to Hell. It was black and sooty within, and the Devil was not at home, but his grandmother was sitting in a large arm-chair. "What do you want?" said she to him, but she did not look so very wicked. "I should like to have three golden hairs from the devil's head," answered he, "else I cannot keep my wife." - "That is a good deal to ask for," said she; "if the devil comes home and finds you, it will cost you your life; but as I pity you, I will see if I cannot help you." She changed him into an ant and said, "Creep into the folds of my dress, you will be safe there." - "Yes," answered he, "so far, so good; but there are three things besides that I want to know: why a fountain which once flowed with wine has become dry, and no longer gives even water; why a tree which once bore golden apples does not even put forth leaves; and why a ferry-man must always be going backwards and forwards, and is never set free?" - "Those are difficult questions," answered she, "but only be silent and quiet and pay attention to what the devil says when I pull out the three golden hairs."
As the evening came on, the devil returned home. No sooner had he entered than he noticed that the air was not pure. "I smell man's flesh," said he; "all is not right here." Then he pried into every corner, and searched, but could not find anything. His grandmother scolded him. "It has just been swept," said she, "and everything put in order, and now you are upsetting it again; you have always got man's flesh in your nose. Sit down and eat your supper." When he had eaten and drunk he was tired, and laid his head in his grandmother's lap, and before long he was fast asleep, snoring and breathing heavily. Then the old woman took hold of a golden hair, pulled it out, and laid it down near her. "Oh!" cried the devil, "what are you doing?"
"I have had a bad dream," answered the grandmother, "so I seized hold of your hair." - "What did you dream then?" said the devil. "I dreamed that a fountain in a market-place from which wine once flowed was dried up, and not even water would flow out of it; what is the cause of it?" - "Oh, ho! if they did but know it," answered the devil; "there is a toad sitting under a stone in the well; if they killed it, the wine would flow again."
He went to sleep again and snored until the windows shook. Then she pulled the second hair out. "Ha! what are you doing?" cried the devil angrily. "Do not take it ill," said she, "I did it in a dream." - "What have you dreamt this time?" asked he. "I dreamt that in a certain kingdom there stood an apple-tree which had once borne golden apples, but now would not even bear leaves. What, think you, was the reason?"
"Oh! if they did but know," answered the devil. "A mouse is gnawing at the root; if they killed this they would have golden apples again, but if it gnaws much longer the tree will wither altogether. But leave me alone with your dreams: if you disturb me in my sleep again you will get a box on the ear." The grandmother spoke gently to him until he fell asleep again and snored. Then she took hold of the third golden hair and pulled it out. The devil jumped up, roared out, and would have treated her ill if she had not quieted him once more and said, "Who can help bad dreams?"
"What was the dream, then?" asked he, and was quite curious. "I dreamt of a ferry-man who complained that he must always ferry from one side to the other, and was never released. What is the cause of it?" - "Ah! the fool," answered the devil; "when any one comes and wants to go across he must put the oar in his hand, and the other man will have to ferry and he will be free." As the grandmother had plucked out the three golden hairs, and the three questions were answered, she let the old serpent alone, and he slept until daybreak. When the devil had gone out again the old woman took the ant out of the folds of her dress, and gave the luck-child his human shape again.
"There are the three golden hairs for you," said she. "What the Devil said to your three questions, I suppose you heard?" - "Yes," answered he, "I heard, and will take care to remember." - "You have what you want," said she, "and now you can go your way." He thanked the old woman for helping him in his need, and left hell well content that everything had turned out so fortunately. When he came to the ferry-man he was expected to give the promised answer. "Ferry me across first," said the luck-child, "and then I will tell you how you can be set free," and when he reached the opposite shore he gave him the devil's advice: "Next time any one comes, who wants to be ferried over, just put the oar in his hand."
He went on and came to the town wherein stood the unfruitful tree, and there too the watchman wanted an answer. So he told him what he had heard from the devil: "Kill the mouse which is gnawing at its root, and it will again bear golden apples." Then the watchman thanked him, and gave him as a reward two asses laden with gold, which followed him. At last he came to the town whose well was dry. He told the watchman what the devil had said: "A toad is in the well beneath a stone; you must find it and kill it, and the well will again give wine in plenty." The watchman thanked him, and also gave him two asses laden with gold.
At last the luck-child got home to his wife, who was heartily glad to see him again, and to hear how well he had prospered in everything. To the King he took what he had asked for, the devil's three golden hairs, and when the King saw the four asses laden with gold he was quite content, and said, "Now all the conditions are fulfilled, and you can keep my daughter. But tell me, dear son-in-law, where did all that gold come from? this is tremendous wealth!" - "I was rowed across a river," answered he, "and got it there; it lies on the shore instead of sand." - "Can I too fetch some of it?" said the King; and he was quite eager about it. "As much as you like," answered he. "There is a ferry-man on the river; let him ferry you over, and you can fill your sacks on the other side."
The greedy King set out in all haste, and when he came to the river he beckoned to the ferry-man to put him across. The ferry-man came and bade him get in, and when they got to the other shore he put the oar in his hand and sprang out. But from this time forth the King had to ferry, as a punishment for his sins. Perhaps he is ferrying still? If he is, it is because no one has taken the oar from him.
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Story DNA
Moral
Good fortune and perseverance can overcome malevolent intentions, and greed often leads to one's downfall.
Plot Summary
A boy born with a prophecy to marry the King's daughter faces repeated murder attempts by the jealous King. Surviving each time through luck and unexpected kindness, he eventually marries the princess. The King then demands he fetch three golden hairs from the Devil, hoping for his death. On his quest, the boy gathers three unsolved problems from townsfolk. With the help of the Devil's grandmother, he obtains the hairs and the solutions to the problems. Returning, he solves the problems, gains wealth, and tricks the greedy King into becoming the perpetual ferryman, thus securing his happy ending and punishing the King.
Themes
Emotional Arc
suffering to triumph
Writing Style
Narrative Elements
Cultural Context
The Grimm's tales often reflect a blend of ancient Germanic folklore and Christian morality, with clear distinctions between good and evil, and justice often served through supernatural means or poetic retribution.
Plot Beats (15)
- A boy is born with a caul, prophesied to marry the King's daughter.
- The King, hearing the prophecy, buys the infant and attempts to drown him in a box.
- The boy survives, floats to a mill, and is raised by the miller and his wife.
- Fourteen years later, the King discovers the boy and sends him with a letter ordering his death.
- The boy gets lost in a forest and stays with robbers, who read the letter, pity him, and replace it with one ordering his marriage to the princess.
- The Queen, following the altered letter, marries the boy to the princess.
- The King returns, discovers the marriage, and demands the boy fetch three golden hairs from the Devil to keep his daughter, hoping for his death.
- On his journey, the boy promises to find answers for a dried-up fountain, a barren apple tree, and a perpetually ferrying ferryman.
- The boy reaches Hell, where the Devil's grandmother transforms him into an ant and hides him.
- The grandmother pulls three golden hairs from the sleeping Devil, each time asking one of the boy's questions.
- The Devil reveals the solutions: a toad in the fountain, a mouse at the tree's root, and the ferryman can pass the oar to the next passenger.
- The boy returns, shares the solutions, and receives two asses laden with gold for each solved problem.
- The King, seeing the gold, asks how to get more, and the boy tells him about the ferryman.
- The greedy King goes to the ferryman, who passes the oar to him, trapping the King as the new ferryman.
- The boy lives happily with the princess, and the King is punished for his sins.
Characters
Luck-child ★ protagonist
Handsome and agreeable
Attire: Simple tunic and trousers, appropriate for a miller's upbringing, later fine wedding clothes
Brave, resourceful, clever
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A hopeful young teenager with a bright, determined expression and windswept chestnut hair. They wear a simple, well-worn forest green tunic over brown trousers and sturdy leather boots. Standing tall with a confident posture, one hand rests on their hip while the other holds a single, perfect golden coin. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
King ⚔ antagonist
Not described, but implied to be imposing
Attire: Richly embroidered royal robes and crown
Cruel, greedy, easily tricked
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A tall, gaunt man in his late 50s with a cruel, thin-lipped smile and cold, piercing eyes. He has sharp cheekbones, a pointed chin, and slicked-back dark hair streaked with grey. He wears a high-collared, black velvet robe trimmed with dark fur, over which is a suit of matte black armor with sharp, angular pauldrons. A heavy, iron crown sits low on his brow, its points resembling thorns. He is seated on a dark, obsidian throne, one hand resting on its arm, the other holding a scepter topped with a blood-red gem. His posture is rigid and imposing, exuding an aura of menace and absolute authority. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Queen ◆ supporting
Not described
Attire: Elegant gown befitting her royal status
Obedient, dutiful, easily manipulated
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A mature woman in her forties with a kind, observant expression. She wears a modest yet elegant gown of deep blue velvet with silver embroidery along the cuffs and neckline. Her auburn hair is swept into a practical bun, adorned with a simple silver circlet. She stands with a straight, supportive posture, her hands gently clasped before her. Her gaze is attentive and calm. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Devil ⚔ antagonist
Smells of man's flesh
Attire: Implied to be unclothed or wearing simple demonic garb
Gullible, easily angered, territorial
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A demonic figure with crimson skin, sharp horns curving from his brow, and piercing yellow eyes. He has a muscular build, pointed ears, and a forked tail. Dressed in a flowing black cape with gold trim over dark, ornate armor, he stands with a confident, menacing posture. His expression is a cruel, knowing smile, one clawed hand resting on his hip. The scene is set in a shadowy cavern with faint glowing embers. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Old Woman (Devil's Grandmother) ◆ supporting
Wrinkled, cunning eyes
Attire: Simple, dark-colored dress
Deceptive, helpful (to the protagonist), quick-witted
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A very old, hunched woman with deeply wrinkled, sallow skin and a sharp, angular face. She has long, stringy white hair under a tattered black hooded cloak. Her eyes are a piercing, unnatural yellow. She wears a dark, ragged dress beneath the cloak, with a stained leather apron. She stands in a dim, cluttered forest hut, leaning forward to stir a bubbling cauldron over a low fire with a long wooden spoon. Her expression is one of cunning, malicious concentration. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
King's Daughter ◆ supporting
Handsome and agreeable
Attire: Fine wedding clothes
Content
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A young princess in her late teens with a kind and serene expression, standing gracefully. She has long, flowing chestnut hair adorned with a delicate silver tieta set with small pearls. She wears an elegant, floor-length gown of deep sapphire blue silk with intricate silver embroidery along the bodice and sleeves. The dress has a fitted waist and a full skirt. Her posture is poised yet approachable, with her hands gently clasped in front of her. She looks directly ahead with a gentle, thoughtful smile. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Ferryman ○ minor
Strong arms from rowing
Attire: Simple work clothes
Weary, desperate for freedom
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An elderly man with a deeply lined face and a long, grey beard, wearing a heavy, dark brown hooded cloak over a roughspun tunic and trousers. He holds a tall, wooden staff in one hand and a simple, unlit lantern in the other. His posture is slightly stooped, his expression weary but patient, as if waiting by a misty riverbank. Plain white background, full body visible head to toe, single figure, no watermark, no text, no signature.
Locations
Mill on the River
A mill situated on a river, with a mill-dam where the box carrying the luck-child gets caught.
Mood: Serendipitous, life-saving
The luck-child is rescued and adopted by the miller and his wife.
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Early morning mist rises from a slow-moving river, casting a soft, diffused light over an old stone mill. The timber mill-dam creates a gentle cascade, where a small, weathered wooden box is caught in the tangled reeds and mossy rocks. The mill building has a large, motionless waterwheel, its wood dark with age. Weeping willows line the far bank, their branches trailing in the water. The palette is muted: soft greys, damp browns, deep greens, and the pale gold of dawn. Atmosphere is quiet, still, and slightly melancholic, with a sense of forgotten time. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
Cottage in a Large Forest
A small cottage with a fire inside, located deep within a large, dark forest.
Mood: Dangerous, but ultimately helpful
The luck-child's letter is intercepted and altered by the robbers, changing his fate.
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A small, rustic cottage with a thatched roof and warm amber light glowing from its windows sits nestled among towering, ancient trees in a vast, dark forest at twilight. A thin wisp of smoke curls from its stone chimney. The forest is dense with deep shadows, gnarled roots, and a carpet of moss and ferns. A narrow, winding dirt path leads to its wooden door. The atmosphere is serene yet mysterious, with a soft mist clinging to the forest floor. The sky above the canopy is a deep indigo, with the last hints of sunset fading. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
Hell / Devil's Home
The devil's home, occupied by the devil and his grandmother. The air smells of man's flesh.
Mood: Eerie, dangerous, but also somewhat domestic
The luck-child obtains the three golden hairs and answers to the riddles.
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Eternal twilight over a jagged obsidian landscape, lit by the glow of molten rivers carving through black rock. The air shimmers with heat haze and thick, sulfurous smoke rising from fissures. Twisted, leafless trees of charcoal claw at a bruised purple sky. In the distance, a fortress of sharpened bone and dark iron looms, its towers emitting a dull, pulsating red light. The ground is a cracked, ashen plain smoldering with embers. no border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration
River Shore
The shore of a river, implied to be abundant with gold instead of sand.
Mood: Deceptive, leading to the King's downfall
The King is tricked into becoming the ferryman as punishment for his greed.
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A serene river shore at sunset, where the sandy banks are replaced by abundant, glittering gold nuggets and flakes. The calm river reflects the warm, golden light of the setting sun, its waters a deep sapphire blue. Lush, ancient willow trees with drooping branches line the opposite bank, their leaves tinged with amber. The sky is a gradient of peach, lavender, and soft gold, with a few wispy clouds. Distant, rolling mountains are silhouetted against the twilight. The atmosphere is magical, tranquil, and richly saturated with warm colors. No border, no frame, no watermark, no text, no signature, edge-to-edge illustration.
